Negative and positive music videos to how women are shown in music videos.
In the music video 'Telephone' by Lady Gaga, all the women in the music video are definitely shown as being objects of desire because all of the women are dressed in mainly revealing clothes and have scenes of sexual movement such as kissing, dancing, licking and other motions that are seen as being pornagraphic but although most of the video was in a sexual manor, there were scenes of women being shown as masculine and the men as weak and powerless to the music video. Maybe because of this the music video was trying to show a message of feminine masculinity.
In this music video of Katy perry "part of me", this is a perfect example of how women are not being treated as objects of desire and challenging the stereotype. The video consists of a women that is weak and turns into something strong and with the view of her going into the army with other men and women who are equal in how the army would be. The movement of the video is shown as aggressive to kicking the camera or being shown in an animalistic way by working hard definitely not and object of desire.
What you have said here is solid, but there is a real lack of examples from either video. Also please consider how you structure a sentence.
T: What you must do now is develop your points and fully explain them using multiple specific examples. Pick out all of the technical aspects (Mise-en-scene, editing, lyrics etc)